Keep in mind this was a talk originally. Talks are going to be structured differently than essays.
Although, a professor at my university gave excellent advice to someone in my research group after an interview talk dry-run: put your conclusions first. Say the most important thing as soon as you can, because most people will not follow the whole talk, for many different reasons. I've tried to structure talks like this since hearing that.
Although, a professor at my university gave excellent advice to someone in my research group after an interview talk dry-run: put your conclusions first. Say the most important thing as soon as you can, because most people will not follow the whole talk, for many different reasons. I've tried to structure talks like this since hearing that.